Comments to Orphea's Song

Was it sexy enough for you?

Heh. I knew she'd do it the moment they told her not to. She was only human afterall... Good story. Now I have to go and find a nice flufy one that doesn't hit to close to home. Becouse I know I'd sing people into my madness if <I>singing<I> was all I had left...

Was it too short?

Definitely too short. A couple of editing/spelling issues that, for me, stall the reading of the story. whine (wine) and doctor (Dr.) being the ones I recall first. In modern day Turkey they would have been stoned, btw. Hard to see that changing that much even in 2067, sad to say. It took a bit to get into it, second or third day, but once in I wanted to keep reading until the end. I would have liked to see the plot develop a bit more as I was just getting interested in Maria when she veered out of the story line. I didn't understand the rebellion issue, as just a plot device to kill Ilura it was too much. As a seperate sub-plot that could be extended in novella or novel length then okay. Good story though, I liked the characters but the sad twisting of Orphea at the end was ultimately disappointing as I was invested in all the characters. email included if you want me to address specific american-english items. Either way, thanks for the story. David

So, how did you like it?

Hey! I hope your pleased! i was up all night reading this story because i jus couldn't stop, its truely excellent, i don't usually like sad ending but they're good for making u think and i've been thinkin bout it al day...good idea with the no-more-britain thing tho a little scary coz guess where im from!im a writer too and i love reading story that are a bit far out like this one good job! x